annerb: (Teal'c and Vala)
annerb ([personal profile] annerb) wrote2008-06-09 05:15 pm
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Remember that 20 Characters writing meme I did way back when? Well, here's another one off the list. :)
For [personal profile] surreallis who wanted: Vala and Teal'c!  "I do not think it means what you think it means."

Hit the Road

The photo had been taped up above Teal’c’s mirror as long as Vala knew him.  At first glance, it seemed a rather nondescript geological formation, sky being far more of interest to her than earth, but she knew him well enough now to understand that it had to be important somehow.

“Have you been there?” she asked once as they got ready for a mission.

His posture did not change, nor did his expression. “I have not,” he replied, his voice as impassive as his face.

She heard it anyway though.

That was when she realized there had been a major oversight on the part of their teammates.  Granted they were busy all the time with fate of the galaxy stuff, but honestly, she’d only been here a matter of months and was already going stir crazy.  How had Teal’c somehow managed to live on this planet for nine years and not really see any of it?

Clearly they needed one of those famous Tau’ri rites of passage she’d seen in the movies: a road trip.

Which meant they would need a car.

Vala knew better than to ask Daniel or Sam, who would come up with a million reasons why it was a bad idea.  Cam would just ask to come along and Landry had a serious lack of imagination.  General O’Neill was her best hope.

She knew she’d won the moment he answered the phone, his voice heavy with indignation and the same edge of being trapped that she could see sometimes in Teal’c.

Most people wouldn’t have been able to see past two aliens wanting to run wild across state lines, but General O’Neill had rebelled enough in his day to know the difference between a lark and a rescue mission.

“Just don’t…blow anything up, okay?” he said, his own voice wistful.

Vala always knew the general saw a lot more than he let on.

In the car, slipping away from the pressing suburbs of Colorado Springs, Vala realized she’d organized this jailbreak as much for herself as Teal’c.  Taking a deep breath, she relaxed into the seductive lure of freedom.  She had no problems with impure motives if the end results were the same.

As signs of civilization began to fall away, so did Teal’c’s careful adherence to speed limits, his foot pressing towards the floor.  It was only as they sped into open countryside, the wind whipping over their heads, the world pushing back at them, that the layers of restraint finally peeled back.

Out here, they had nothing to prove, no standards to live up to.

Somewhere in the desert north of Albuquerque, Teal’c pulled over and taught Vala how to drive.  Surprisingly, she found she actually preferred it to flying a space ship.  At least on the ground you always knew which way was up.

Dusk bled into the sort of complete darkness that only existed in the desert.  They continued driving, Vala dozing in the passenger seat.  She had it tilted back as far as it could go, staring up at the stars and the pitted face of Earth’s moon, never having realized before how much it resembled her own childhood moon.

She’d believed it long forgotten, buried with a million other unpleasant things, but didn’t mind the reminder as much as she would have thought.

Teal’c tuned the radio to some distant station and through the light layer of static she heard crooning voices over steady beats and some sort of sharp, scaling instrument.  Classic rock, Teal’c informed her, his own voice occasionally joining in.

She wasn’t sure what rocks had to do with it, but didn’t bother asking, letting her eyes slide shut with the wind in her face and Teal’c’s quiet voice in her ear.

It was barely dawn when they finally reached their destination, Vala waking to find the car pulled off to the side of the road, Teal’c leaning back against the hood.

Rubbing the sleep from her eyes, she stepped out of the car, the view in front of her seeming to swallow her whole.  The tiny postcard in Teal’c’s locker hadn’t done it justice.

Not far from where they stood, the ground dropped away, opening into a canyon that stretched as far as the eye could see, a dizzying mix of pinks and grays and oranges.  In the shadows at the very bottom, Vala could just make out a thin green line that marked the river responsible for this formation. The small influence that gently stripped away at the rock, millennia after millennia cutting through the earth one grain of sand at a time.

It was beautiful, this Grand Canyon, but she knew it had to be more than that.  The galaxy was full of beautiful things.

Vala moved to sit on the hood next to Teal’c, her shoulder bumping against his.

“So tell me,” she said.  “What is it about this place, really?”

Teal’c looked down at her for a moment, before returning his eyes to the canyon as if it held him under some spell.  

“It makes me feel small,” he said.

Vala looked back at the formation, her eyes straining as if somehow hoping to swallow the entire vista at once, knowing it was impossible.  Too much for one mind to hold.  

He was right; it did make her feel small.  She just wasn’t sure why that was such a great thing.  To be small was to be forgotten, sometimes.  To be helpless.

“The Goa’uld build giant monuments to their own greatness,” Teal’c said.  “Pyramids and palaces, ships built to intimidate and awe, to be worthy of worship.  But they are lies.”

“And this is real?” Vala asked.

“Perhaps,” Teal’c said.

Maybe it was something real enough to be believed in.  Something bigger than yourself to stare at in awe.

Two aliens, one an ex-goddess and the other an ex-slave, driving across the surface of a small distant planet, looking for a glimmer of truth.  She never could have imagined it, even a year ago.

“This is not where I thought I would end up,” Vala said.

Teal’c nodded, self-satisfaction curving his lips.

Maybe that was what faith was really about, taking a leap and having enough guts to hang on and see where it might take you.

Teal'c glanced at Vala, sliding her a look that was a bit too perceptive for comfort.  Jumping down off the hood with a little hop, she dusted off her pants.  "I think we are pretty close to another impressive geological formation I've always wanted to see," she said.

Teal'c gave her an indulgent smile, as if he knew she was purposively changing the subject and didn't mind letting her get away with it.  "What is the name of this place?" he asked.

"Las Vegas," she said, swiping the keys from his hand.  "And I'm driving."

Slipping into the driver's seat, she slid on her sunglasses and cranked up the radio. 

They had miles of road to go.
ext_2131: picture of a fish with lots of green (Tealc/Vala)

[identity profile] holdouttrout.livejournal.com 2008-06-10 01:02 am (UTC)(link)
Wonderful. Your Vala voice is really lovely--tentative but fun, and just a little bit wicked. And the juxtaposition of her with Teal'c really, really works. This is why there ought to be more Teal'c and Vala fic, because they work so well together.

Jack totally would help them in their jailbreak. :-)

[identity profile] annerbhp.livejournal.com 2008-06-10 05:46 am (UTC)(link)
Thanks! I think this ficlet was born of that fandom secret I did awhile ago, the idea that maybe Vala understands Teal'c better than everyone else, that maybe she can see things the others miss, not being aliens themselves. (and nice icon. ;)
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[identity profile] surreallis.livejournal.com 2008-06-10 01:03 am (UTC)(link)
YAY! Okay, and I totally forgot about even asking for this in that meme. But this is wonderful! Vala and Teal'c make the greatest couple, romantic or not. So much they could share and already share. And I love that they went to see the Grand Canyon. But, dude, omg, you now HAVE to write about their adventures in Vegas.

[identity profile] annerbhp.livejournal.com 2008-06-10 05:48 am (UTC)(link)
You forgot? I mean, it was only like eight months ago. Lol. I was considering doing another ficlet meme kind of thing, but I was feeling guilty about all these earlier ones I never finished, so here I am, trying to finish! ;)

Oh...Vegas. Yes, I'm sure things got interesting out there. Maybe they could do something that would require Jack to fly out and bail them out, so he could have a little road trip fun himself. Snerk.
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[identity profile] gabolange.livejournal.com 2008-06-10 01:07 am (UTC)(link)
There's something about this story that really pings for me right now: the emotion of the road trip, the sensation of standing on the edge of greatness, the idea that faith is about hanging on around the next curve. The characters are spot on--I especially adore Jack's cameo and Vala's observations thereof--but the imagery is what's really getting me.

So very, very lovely.

[identity profile] annerbhp.livejournal.com 2008-06-11 10:21 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! Yeah, I'm sort of a huge fan of the road trip, the way travel can make some things a lot more obvious or clear.

[identity profile] lorettakay.livejournal.com 2008-06-10 01:12 am (UTC)(link)
This is really lovely.

[identity profile] annerbhp.livejournal.com 2008-06-10 05:07 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you!

[identity profile] katcorvi.livejournal.com 2008-06-10 02:06 am (UTC)(link)
Wow, this is quite nice. I love the idea of the two aliens setting out on the classic road trip and yes, Jack would be the best choice when planning this sort of activity. You've nailed Vala; in fact, I think you've given her more depth than the show writers did. The mention of her home moon is nice, and nicer for Vala to be able to think about her past without feeling hurt.

Good story.

[identity profile] annerbhp.livejournal.com 2008-06-10 08:24 pm (UTC)(link)
Hey, I didn't have Teal'c say 'Indeed' even once, shouldn't I get an award or something? ;) Vala is a fun enigma. I should try writing her more. But I know you would be just as happy with some more shippiness (two gen fics in a row? *gasp*)

[identity profile] annienau08.livejournal.com 2008-06-10 02:37 am (UTC)(link)
Eee! You wrote Teal'c and Vala! And it is amazing and I love it and it is so going to be my next rec over at [livejournal.com profile] stargateficrec.

Squee!

[identity profile] majorsamfan.livejournal.com 2008-06-10 03:02 am (UTC)(link)
Love your icon! He didn't even MOVE when she jumped up on him! CB is SO skinny!

[identity profile] annerbhp.livejournal.com 2008-06-10 08:22 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! :)

[identity profile] mrspollifax.livejournal.com 2008-06-10 02:50 am (UTC)(link)
Oh! You've really got my favorite thing about Vala - the way she's learned to cope by acting capricious, but it's a cover so no one knows how much she's paying attention and how vulnerable she is. And I just *love* the insight you've given into Teal'c's war. And the way they play off each other is just perfect, and Jack feeling that solidarity with them, of course you are right. Really lovely.

[identity profile] annerbhp.livejournal.com 2008-06-10 05:23 pm (UTC)(link)
Yes, that's exactly it! I love Vala's various layers, the fact that her surface performance is often just flash-bang to distract from what's really going on underneath. Such a great character. I only wish we'd gotten even more of her! :)

Thanks!

[identity profile] majorsamfan.livejournal.com 2008-06-10 02:59 am (UTC)(link)
Oh, well done! And the ending...Vegas! Sooooo Vala! Now THERE they might get into a little trouble.

Crossover with CSI anyone?

(And PS...Ronon wants to go too!)

[identity profile] annerbhp.livejournal.com 2008-06-10 05:09 pm (UTC)(link)
Haha! I could just imagine what Grissom might make of them. Vala would probably cheat at cards and get on the wrong side of some old time casino mobsters. That would be hilarious. :)

[identity profile] 6beforelunch.livejournal.com 2008-06-10 12:47 pm (UTC)(link)
So very great. You've captured Teal'c and Vala so well. I love the characterization of Vala, the way she sees things that most people miss. And Jack. Oh, Jack. One line of dialog but it fits him so well and it captures his Washington angst (really, is there ever enough Jack in Washington angst?). Very very nicely done. :)

[identity profile] annerbhp.livejournal.com 2008-06-10 05:12 pm (UTC)(link)
I have to admit, the idea of Jack in Washington has never sit well with me, though it makes sense that he would suffer it for the benefit of his team. Poor guy.

As for Vala, I love the idea that maybe she gets Teal'c more than anyone else. They have such a great friendship. (And now I'm thinking how weird it must be to be Teal'c and actually be close friends with someone he would have once thought of as a god.)

Thanks!

[identity profile] 6beforelunch.livejournal.com 2008-06-10 09:40 pm (UTC)(link)
And now I'm thinking how weird it must be to be Teal'c and actually be close friends with someone he would have once thought of as a god.

Man, that's a great observation. I've never thought about it before, but it must be deeply strange for him. *ponders*

[identity profile] a-loquita.livejournal.com 2008-06-10 01:38 pm (UTC)(link)
I love, love, love Vala. Did I mention love? And so many people I feel don't do her justice in fic. She's got so much more going on below the surface and I love that you've captured that.

[identity profile] annerbhp.livejournal.com 2008-06-10 05:14 pm (UTC)(link)
She's a hard character to nail down, I think. It's easy to get distracted by her flashy behavior and ignore her vulnerabilities. It's always been that juxtaposition that attracted me to her. What a great, complex character. I am so glad to hear that my attempt to capture her worked for you. :)

[identity profile] beanpot.livejournal.com 2008-06-10 01:49 pm (UTC)(link)
“It makes me feel small,” he said.

This is quite stunning and yet subtle. I love the idea of Teal'c needing to see monuments that are real and not formed for reasons of malice. I love that Vala gets that.

And I love that I am now awaiting the crack fic of Vegas.

**twiddles thumbs**

[identity profile] annerbhp.livejournal.com 2008-06-10 05:17 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you!

I haven't written about it much, but I've always been fascinated by Teal'c's spirituality and how he had this religion that was so fundamentally central to his life, but has now left it behind and how he might feel the need to seek something out to fill that void, something authentic.

Oy, crackfic? Me? *blinks innocently*
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[identity profile] sg-fignewton.livejournal.com 2008-06-11 12:19 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, just lovely! You've packed layers and layers and layers into this, with the light-hearted surface just barely hiding the elegant depths. Teal'c's thoughts on the Grand Canyon were just so... Teal'c.

I love that Jack let them go in an instant, and that Teal'c is only sedate when he needs to be, and that he taught Vala to drive. I love that bonding in search of glimmers, and finding what they could where it was to be found.

Have we really coaxed you to the gen side? Hooray for us! :)

[identity profile] annerbhp.livejournal.com 2008-06-12 05:04 am (UTC)(link)
Haha. Two gen fics in a row! Who knew that was possible? ;)

I've always thought Vala and Teal'c have just an amazing friendship. And I like the idea that of everyone, Jack can probably relate the best to being in an alien place. But that could just be me finding Jack working in Washington depressing as heck. Lol.

Thanks!

[identity profile] flingslass.livejournal.com 2008-06-11 12:59 pm (UTC)(link)
Nice and a little wicked because I can see Vala off to Vegas :D

[identity profile] annerbhp.livejournal.com 2008-06-12 05:05 am (UTC)(link)
Heh. Thanks! :)
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[personal profile] aelfgyfu_mead 2008-06-13 09:37 pm (UTC)(link)
Hurray for the aliens on a road trip! Much as I love the rest of the team, it wouldn't be the same if they took any of the others with them. I can't believe they never got Teal'c to the Grand Canyon! That was a serious oversight!

Vala in Las Vegas will be second only to blowing things up. Jack may not be entirely pleased. :-)

[identity profile] morjana.livejournal.com 2008-06-14 08:12 am (UTC)(link)
Lovely story, thank you so much for sharing.

I was struck by your line, "The small influence that gently stripped away at the rock, millennia after millennia cutting through the earth one grain of sand at a time."

Sort of similar to the Jaffa rebellion against the Goa'uld, eh? They kept chipping at away at the System Lords and their power structure, and along with the help of the Tau'ri, Tok'ra and other allies, finally won their freedom.

Perhaps not only did Teal'c want to see the Grand Canyon because it "makes him feel small," but also as a physical representation of the Jaffa struggle.

Or...I could be overthinking this.

:)

Morjana
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[identity profile] sg-fignewton.livejournal.com 2008-11-12 03:12 pm (UTC)(link)
This one has been in my to-rec folder for a while - glad I finally got the chance to rec (http://community.livejournal.com/stargateficrec/1195359.html) it. :)

[identity profile] annerbhp.livejournal.com 2008-11-12 07:40 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! That is so kind of you. And now it has me thinking that I need to write some more gen one of these days. ;)
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[identity profile] sg-fignewton.livejournal.com 2008-11-13 02:26 pm (UTC)(link)
Hee, yes! We will corrupt you to the gen side, yes, my precious!
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[identity profile] introductory.livejournal.com 2008-11-12 07:19 pm (UTC)(link)
Hey, this is a really lovely fic. I love the quiet friendship that Vala and Teal'c share.

[identity profile] annerbhp.livejournal.com 2008-11-12 07:41 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you so much! They really are a terrific pair. :)

[identity profile] hariboo-smirks.livejournal.com 2008-11-13 06:08 pm (UTC)(link)
Just beautiful. I love how you portrayed these two.

[identity profile] annerbhp.livejournal.com 2008-11-15 06:09 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you so much! I don't get to write these two nearly as much as I would like to. :)

[identity profile] oltha_heri.livejournal.com 2008-11-15 01:25 am (UTC)(link)
I love to see these two together. I feel like Teal'c has the easiest time seeing past all of her flair. And I love that you've given Vala depth, without making her totally emo, and you've given Teal'c emotions without making him ooc, so congrats.

You also portrayed Jack excellently. The quick characterisations of the whole team in this paragraph:

Vala knew better than to ask Daniel or Sam, who would come up with a million reasons why it was a bad idea.  Cam would just ask to come along and Landry had a serious lack of imagination.  General O’Neill was her best hope.

Were so spot on as well, especially the Cam bit.

[identity profile] annerbhp.livejournal.com 2008-11-15 06:11 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you! I think Vala is a hard one to write, it's too easy to make her completely over the top or to make her, as you say, very emo. It's a delicate balance that makes her so interesting. To me at least. :)

Thanks for reading!

[identity profile] ticketsonmyself.livejournal.com 2009-04-20 08:36 pm (UTC)(link)
this story is so lovely and understated and splendidly characterized. I love road trip stories and I want things to have happened exactly like this (though I wouldn't have minded at all if Cameron had ended up tagging along!) for two of our favorite aliens on Earth. I'm glad Teal'c didn't say "Indeed" even once! And hooray for Jack, whom you've characterized so well in very few words, and who appears only by phone at that.

[identity profile] princessofg.livejournal.com 2010-01-08 02:15 am (UTC)(link)
reading this after all this time because of the vala gen fic day. thank you. i love this idea; that they would go together and that jack would arrange it.

well done.

[identity profile] sela21k.livejournal.com 2010-01-22 01:57 am (UTC)(link)
I came to this through sg_fignewton's rec. Although I really have never liked Vala, this is a beautiful piece that makes me maybe like her a little bit more. And of course, who doesn't love Teal'c? :)

Very well written. I really liked it a lot.